tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6816352965380485632.post2182106946416458112..comments2023-09-13T12:36:39.587-04:00Comments on Erotic Satisfiction: A Tied PresentAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08698304192173009677noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6816352965380485632.post-68163268393054411402015-11-11T10:58:21.536-05:002015-11-11T10:58:21.536-05:00Thanks for comments. I do have an issue with tens...Thanks for comments. I do have an issue with tenses, but I think that the perspectives are what I was going for. It's all from a first person perspective, but I describe what the first person sees of the second person. Thanks for the constructive criticism I will keep that in mind.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08698304192173009677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6816352965380485632.post-67824354634570929972015-11-10T07:55:46.077-05:002015-11-10T07:55:46.077-05:00You're mixing your tenses. The story starts in...You're mixing your tenses. The story starts in third person then it slips into second person half way through. You need to keep it consistent. At the moment, it's all over the place.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com